To Swim



maybe we don't open our eyes all the way because
i t ' s   h a r d

and someone told us not to
oh it's black out there
n i g h t

maybe we don't swim in the ocean because we don't know it's there
waiting for us
coral reefs
trapeze dolphins
snail armies
whale choirs
herring ballets
b l u e
and
o u r s

but the puddles in the street are so much more
i n t e r e s t i n g

maybe we don't go diving because
nobody ever told us that we were born
knowing how to
s w i m

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When I write poetry I feel like I’m trying to communicate something but I fail miserably. AHEM. Here’s a little road trip brain gut-job that I don’t know if it makes sense and my grammar is dead so forgive me ok. Love you guys and what’s up today? Hmm?? Tell me all the things.

love,
abbiee

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  1. 'when I write poetry I feel like I'm trying to communicate something but I fail miserably' SAME. But no, your poetry is great, I love this one a lot. i love the puddle/comfort zone analogy compared to the ocean beyond.

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    1. GAH THANK YOU NINA THAT IS A GREAT COMFORT TO ME :''') <3

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  2. This was beautiful. <3 I like writing rhyming poetry, but when I try to write a beautiful piece that DOESN'T rhyme... it doesn't usually work out. :P Well done!

    So glad you had a blast on your long trip! Vacations are the best - but I DEFINITELY understand the need for consistent WiFi.

    ok, so LIFE. So like I moved a week ago?? And now I'm living high on a mountain with beautiful trees and streets in an epic house with a new dog?? So yeah, I feel really blessed right now.

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    1. OMG THANK YOU SO MUCH EMILY. <3333 *hugs and tears* ugh I have a really hard time with rhyming poetry. :P and eeep!! NEW HOUSE NEW DOG YOUR LIFE SOUNDS AWESOME!! congrats, dude!! enjoy it <3

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  3. I really like the first two lines. Like, the whole thing is good but the first two lines just....I get them.

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    1. YAAAAS <333 i get u *hugs*

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  4. Gorgeous <3 I love the part about whale choirs and ballet - it painted such a clear picture in my mind. <3

    Ellie | On the Other Side of Reality

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    1. GAH THANK YOU SO MUCH ELLIE <3333

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  5. Your poetry is amazinggggg. Like literally everything that you do is fabulous, can I just be you? Thanks.

    Ummmmm life. I apparently have to go to the college campus where I'm taking classes today or tomorrow so that I don't get lost on Monday because I'm directionally challenged. Yayyyy.

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    1. ASDFGJKL THANK YOU GRACE ANNE YOU'RE PERFECT SO THERE IS THAT ;)

      eeep good luck with your classes!! *waffles of comfort*

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  6. I think you communicate wonderfully, this is beautiful! I always look forward to your poetry.

    Elizabeth
    http://whimsicalthoughtss.blogspot.com/

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    1. AW THANK YOU SO MUCH ELIZABETH THAT MEANS THE WORLD TO ME <3

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  7. "Tell me all the things" --> I WOULD BUT CAN'T BC SPEECHLESS BC YOUR TALENTED WORDS GAAAAAH can't function srry IT'S SO BEAUTIFUL <33

    (I'm sorry if that made absolutely no sense xD)

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    1. asdfhjkFGSHJD NONO IT MAKES SENSE AND I'M SLAIN BY YOUR KINDNESS :'''')
      thank you so much Abby <33333333 *muchas hugs*

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  8. WOW SAME I CAN NEVER GET MY POINT ACROSS <3

    but this was so beautiful

    I LOVE IT

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    1. YAY I'M GLAD YOU FEEL ME BRO <3
      THANK YOU SO MUCH AEEPPP

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  9. Oooh, I love the ocean. I'm starting college back up in a couple of days, so I'm pretty stressed but also excited. :) I'll miss summer, but I'm ready for autumn.

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    1. WAAAH I'M GONNA MISS SUMMER TOO. LIKE, SO MUCH. :') *hugs* thank you for reading, Alex!

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  10. FAIL? This is gorgeous, Abbie! :)

    With love and all joy,
    Allie D.
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    www.friendlovesatalltimes.blogspot.com
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    1. AW THANK YOU SO MUCH ALLIE :D

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  11. this is so gorgeous <3 your poetry is so so good, Abbs.
    ALSO THOSE PICTURES GAHHH THAT STUNNING COLOR. woahhh. take me there.

    Liffeee? Idk, school starts next week and I'm currently super, SUPER bored.

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    1. <333 I was definitely swooning over those pictures too omg. AND WEEEP THANK YOU SO MUCH AUTUMN THAT MEANS A LOT TO ME :''') gah sending you all the waffles so you can survive school <3

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  12. You may feel like your poetry is confusing but I love it so much! You are wonderful the
    s p a c e
    in between words and letters was cleaver.

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    1. AASDFGHJK THANK YOU VANESSA. <3 that seriously means so much to me :'''')

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  13. HAHAAAAAA. I LOVE THIS AND I LOVE YOU. plus those pictures speak life u kno. <3 keep writing and i'll be here to listen (most of the time i am because i'm TERRIBLE at thinking up comments whoops so i just read and move on).

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    1. <33333 CALLY YOU ARE AWESOME THANK YOU SO MUCH :'''')

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  14. This makes me think of Hillsong's "Oceans" (although lately everything has been making me think of that song), for we say that we want to walk across deeper waters, but we suffice ourselves with the puddles because the ocean looks too big. Too much. Too scary. We don't know that we have been born again with the power to swim.

    This poem was salty water, fantastic Ariel scenes, and challenging notes all in one. THank you for these words, dear Abbie. (hehehehehe)

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    1. I LOVE THAT SONG. <3333 i was just singing it the other day. it brings me such unfathomable peace. :) ASDFGHJKL YOU GET THIS POEM. THANK YOU. *hugs you and flails copiously*

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  15. I don't know what you're talking about, because this is BEAUTIFUL. I feel it.

    Serena | poetree {blog}

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    1. THANK YOU SERENA. <333333

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  16. this. this. this. THE FORMAT AND EVERYTHING ARGHHH ITS SO PRETTY AND BEAUTIFUL AND INTROSPECTIVE AND LOVELY AND okay i've just arrived but holy crap that poem is everything. I loved it. can't wait to read more of your stuff you beautiful little human <3

    Love,

    Anne // www.aportraitofyouth.co.uk

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    1. asdfghjkljhgsKSJALD FLAILING. <3 OMG THANK YOU SO MUCH THIS COMMENT HAS MADE MY DAY. *dances around happily* GAH THANK YOU. *hugs and waffles*

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  17. Oh, this is so lovely <3 Poetry is something I've been dabbling in lately and seeing gorgeous stuff like that is so inspiring to me. Great job!

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    1. GAH THANK YOU SO MUCH AIMEE THAT MEANS A LOT TO ME :''')

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  18. This. Is. So. Lovely.
    <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3

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  19. Sorry about the deleted comment above! What I was trying to say was that I think your poem is perfect. ♥

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    1. OMG YOU'RE THE SWEETEST <3

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  20. That last stanza slayed me. I love this and I love you.

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    1. I LOVE YOU SO MUCH BRO THANK YOU :''')

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  21. 'SCUSE ME BUT THAT WAS FABULOUSLY COMMUNCIATED. especially the last few lines. Like WAT. <3 <3

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    1. ASDFKLJHGFDS THIS MEANS EVERYTHING COMING FROM THE POETRY GODDESS HERSELF <3 THANK YOU OMG

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  22. okay what the heck.
    feel free to do more poetry posts girl because this is gold.

    and this really really got to me. gosh.

    Randy Abby
    WAKE ME UP Blog

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    1. OMGOGMGOMG <3333 MY HEART BE STILL

      THANK YOU RANDY ABBY THAT MEANS EVERYTHING TO ME <3333

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  23. It's not perfect, but you've got to practice to get there. If you love writing poetry then just practice and you will get there. Personally, I love swimming so I liked it ;) Anyway, I just tagged you in an original tag I have created. Let me know if you decide to do it and I hope you’ll have fun! Here’s the link: https://readingexperienceswithnora.wordpress.com/2016/08/23/the-mathematics-book-tag-original

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    1. Thank you for the tag, Nora!! :D

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  24. Love! <3

    https://everythingisbetterwithpolkadots.blogspot.com/

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kind words are like raindrops on the desert. they make me bloom with happiness, as absolutely cliche and cheesy as that sounds. even if it's just a simple alt+3 i will heart you for it. so, go ahead! MAKE MY DAY. literally.